I believe in positive thoughts, which plays a very important role in our life. Thought means thinking of the person. Thought is a start process to make a planning for our future. A way that make future, a way that can that change the world. A positive thinking led to positive life style, but the negative thinking led to negative lifestyle. Nature, personality and feeling reflects the thinking of a person.
Thinking give us imagination. Thought will give motivation to the person to achieve their goal. To imagine something different in a different way, for instance to see the beauty of nature in a different way. Thinking helps in the judgment of person or it also helps in taking decision. If a person thinks about to do his/her work with his/her full efforts then that person can complete his/her work on time. Generally, thinking occurs when we are confronted with a problem which demands solution. Different thinking helps in discovering different methods to solve the problems of our life. “We can’t solve our problem with the same thinking we use this when we created them”. Thinking reflect what is good or bad. It is only depend on us what we think. Thinking helps to us that how to express our feelings to someone in a good way. The famous personalities such as Albert Einstein, Isaac Newton, Thomas Edison, etcetera, their thought were different that is why they make the world different. They discovered many different inventions that has changed the world.
Development starts with a positive thoughts. Discoveries discovered by planning. So, by this we can understand that thinking is a start and a end where people want. “The more you do what you’re doing, the more you will get of what you have created. Logical thinking helps to develop a creative world. It helps us to generate the power of thinking, motive to do hard work to get success , good person and so on. Thought make changes in our life. By having positive energies thought it will make every thing easy, smooth and encourages us to face challenges. As, Thomus Edison once wrote,” Genius is one percent, inspiration and perspiration is 99 percent. so, creative things help to achieve your result. Last but not the least, positive waves creates power of motivation to make every thing easy and also make us a gentle and nice person. Due to our parents, our world and yourself also feels proud. Everyone should have positive thoughts, don’t give up face every problem. think like that I can do it, u will do it. Nothing is impossible, everything is possible.
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Positive thinking reveals the personality of people, which plays a very vital role in our life. I believe in positive thoughts. Thought means thinking of the person. Thought is a starting process to make a planning of our future. A way that make future, a way that can change the world. A positive thinking led to positive life style, but the negative thinking always depict negative lifestyle. Nature, personality and feeling reflects the thinking of a person.
Thinking give us imagination. Thought will give motivation to the person to achieve their goals. To imagine a different in a different way, to help to see the beauty of nature in a different way. Thinking helps in the judgment of person or it helps in taking decision as well. If a person think about to do his/her work with his/her full efforts then that person can complete his/her work on time. Generally, thinking occurs when we are confronted with a problem which demands solution. Different thinking helps in discovering different methods to all the problems which are in our life. “We can’t solve our problems with the same thinking we use this when we created them”. Thinking indicate which is good or bad. Its only depends on us what we think. Thinking help to us that how too express our feelings in front of someone in a good way. The famous personalities such as Albert Einstein, Isaac Newton, Thomas Edison, etcetera. their thoughts were different that is why they make the world different. They discovered many different inventions that has changed the world. I remembered that when I was in my primary school. There was a quiz competition, in that we had to give answer with in a minute. I was secured and I thought that I can’t do that and I was crying on that moment. Then, my mom came to me in my room, she told me that I know you can do it, don’t think negatively if you think negative then you are not able to do anything. So, always be positive just try to do that. On that time, I feel motivated by having a positive energy. From that time, I always remember my mom’s those words and then I got an different energy that I can do everything if I have positive thinking.
Development starts with positive thoughts. Discoveries appeared by planning. So, by this we can understand that thinking is a start and end where people want. “The more you do what you’re doing, the more you will get of what you have created. Logical thinking helps to develop a creative world. It helps us to generate the power of thinking, motive to do hard work for getting success , good person and so on. Thought make changes in our life. By having positive energies thought it will make every thing easily, smooth and encourage us to face challenges. As, Thomas Edison once wrote,”Genius is one percent, inspiration and perspiration is 99 percent”(Edison, n.d.). Hence, creative thinking help to achieve your result. Last but not the least, positive waves creates power of motivation to make every thing easy and also make us a gentle and nice person. Due to this our parents, whole world and yourself also feel proud. Everyone should have positive thoughts, don’t give up confront every problem. think like that I can do it, everyone will do it. Nothing is impossible, everything is possible.
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Authentic Voice: I believe that you have authentic voice because positive thinking reflect individual’s personality. So it very important aspect of our life.
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Community Relevance: The idea of positive thinking is of great relevance to community. According to me, It is an idea everyone should follow in his\her life to get better future.
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This is really interesting! You focus on (very interesting) abstractions and generalities. That is more of an academic essay style. TELL A STORY.
At the paragraph level, please note that each paragraph must be about ONE main idea.
You can write a point form outline before you start your rough draft. This allows you to clearly organize and see where your writing is going. Once you are done, look at each paragraph. Sum it up in a word or phrase. If you cannot sum it up in a word or phrase, it is probably about too many things and needs to be broken up (and/or you can get rid of parts of the paragraph). Either get rid of some of the paragraph or put the information in a different paragraph.
To catch small errors, read the last sentence first.
Then, read the second last sentence.
Then, the third last and so on.
In this way, you isolate each sentence.
You can find and fix errors much easier in this way.
In fact, if you read the sentences out loud, you can hear errors. The ear catches things the eyes miss!
It is very important that you take the time to do this. It is my favourite editing strategy, and I do it all the time. When I write for a magazine, my rough draft takes 20 hours but I edit it after for 30 or more hours. Writing is re-writing.
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